Name:     SquareFool
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Subject:  Derek's Dreadful Secret!
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. Better than the one I tried, anyway (which will never be seen by human eyes).
You imply, I see, that you are not human... unless you wrote it without once looking at it? We
know your secret now, fanboy...--- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- ---
                    Replying to Original Article:Here we go again, with me saying things like I
know the secret of the universe.  Couple things: Short stories about robbery, assassinations,
etc. are extremely difficult to pull off.  I've tried.  But for the most part, you got this one
over pretty well. Better than the one I tried, anyway (which will never be seen by human eyes). 
Dialogue is a little stilted at some points... once again, this from a screenwriter.  Good
set-up over all, but a little on the short side.  Otherwise, I liked it.
 -D the F